What I Did This Summer….

Its the first day of school at the TKA and the teacher asked each student about what they did this summer.

Jordan:

“This summer I had a lot of fun! I went to the night time zoo. I like the monkeys! I had a lot of friends over. I went swimming. I played laser tag. I went to the beach. My favorite thing was swimming.”

And Corey:

“We went to the San Diego Zoo at night. It was really cool! We heard a lot of cool noises! I scared a lot of people by pressing a button that makes a tiger roar noise. It was funny!

I turned 11 this summer. I had a sleepover with my friend Cheyne in the back of our car. I got an iPod, iTunes gift cards, etc… We also went to laser tag. I had fun at laser tag because you shoot people and get points for it.

I went to Palm Springs. My grandpa was in Alaska. We went swimming a lot! It was really HOT! My cousins were there too.

This summer I had a lot of FUN!!”

The principal thinks that this work is fine for the first day of school, but he’s expecting a significant improvement in sentence structure and creative elaboration.